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RayE · Newbie Joined: 22 Aug 2009 Posts: 3 Career Advice: +0/-0

Hello,
Im having a hard time writting this cover latter, its difficult for me becouse english is my second language, so i would like to ask for help. Here's the cover latter i made, but i would like to emphasis for that I am really interested in this position not becouse i need other job becouse i love working in IT field. Moreover i dont know how to say that im interested in this field for 8 years already i know alot from my own experience.
I would appreciate if you could help.
Thank you

Here is my cover letter:

I am writing to apply for the junior web developer position that you advertised on the craigslist. I am an undergraduate student working on my Computer Science with emphasis in web design degree. I believe that my individualy learned web developing skills combined with my college and university experience makes me a strong candidate for the position outlined in your notice.

The job positions I held, such as manager and office assistant, enhanced my skills in areas such as communication, personal relations, customer service and multitasking and problem solving. I am a creative individual and can think ‘outside the box’ to overcome challenges in the workplace.

Pauloz

RayE

This is actually quite OK, just needs some more information and a bit of polishing. Very minor errors, but you've obviously made an effort to get everything right, and it's worked, you only need to add a paragraph or so.

Since English is your second language, suggest you just plug away at it with spell check and you'll feel more confident.

Comments in italics and suggestions below:

RayE · Newbie Joined: 22 Aug 2009 Posts: 3 Career Advice: +0/-0

Wow! I was amazed when i read this what you done. Thank you very much, hopefully I will be able to get the job now with this amazing cover letter. You mentioned that i should delete office assisnt, should i delete it from my resume too? But what you done is really nice, thank you very much sir.

Pauloz · Posted: Sun Aug 23, 2009 3:21 am Post subject:

RayE

My pleasure.

Perfect. You can include the job title as a heading in bold type, should do it.

The office assistant position is only relevant if there's any admin or other general skills involved. I'd phase it out of applications like this, but keep it handy if you ever need to show any experience in those areas.

Good luck,

RayE · Newbie Joined: 22 Aug 2009 Posts: 3 Career Advice: +0/-0

Hi, its me again, I have a resume and could you please take a look at it? I believe that it should be ok, but if there is something what i could do to improve it let me know
THank you.!

Pauloz · Posted: Mon Aug 24, 2009 12:52 am Post subject:

RayE

Some panel beating required. You've got a lot of good material here, but it's very undersold. The "office assistant" job includes report writing? There are people earning $1000 a week writing reports, as well as counseling. You've got some major career options here, depending on how you want to play them.

I cut and pasted your table. That'll teach me to try to do that on this blog style software:

• Strong computer skills:
Use “strong computer skills” as a heading.

o 2 years experience working with HTML, PHP and CSS.
Like the codes, in what context? Where were you working, what were you doing? You can beef this up as applications, etc.

o A year experience working with ASP.NET, AJAX, SQL, C++/C#, JAVA.
Using the codes in what context? You’ll need to explain that in job applications.

o Strong knowledge of software such as Dreamweaver, Visual Basic, Visual Web Developer, Photoshop, Goldmine, ACT, QuickBooks.
This is very good for getting some jobs in specialized IT work. Use the software as references to pin down any requirements for these materials.

• Two years experience in retail sales, including purchasing, inventory management.

o Skilled in developing successful sales promotions.

o Advising people, writing reports, handling detail work.
The advisory and report stuff is important across the board in many jobs, because it relates to communications, and other workplace basic requirements. Report writing is a job in its own right, you can expand it to identify your areas of expertise.

• A year experience working in office. Specific job title? Needs to relate to admin, or some other identifiable class of job.

o Organizing tasks, analyzing problems for employees.
Too vague. Specifically, in what areas. If you get a “problem solving” job criterion, you’ll need to spell this out.

o Screening telephone calls, receiving/sending mail and packages.
Screening? Elaborate.

• Languages Lithuanian, English, Russian.
o Lithuanian – Native o English – Fluent
o Russian – Intermediate Proficiency

EMPLOYMENT HISTORY Sales Assistant, “STOGIES”, Willowbrook, IL, (February 2009-Present)
• Handled floor and cash register sales.

• Suggested new display idea for house wares product, which improved customers view of-and accessibility to-the product, resulting in increased sales. Sales experience is useful, and so is retail, but I get the impression from your other material that you’ve had more advanced work. Display and presentation skills are sometimes helpful, but question whether relevant to your career skills. You'll need to make it clear during interviews where your real expertise operates.

Office Assistant, Kretinga, Lithuania, (July 2007- July 2008)
• Written letters/papers/proposals, coordinated schedules/times.
This might be more useful than we discussed earlier, with these skills. Again, be specific about the type of work. “Proposals” needs expansion, because it’s way too general without qualifiers. Suggest coordinated schedules/times is a separate heading, because it’s actually different work.

• Counseled/consulted people, operated equipment and skillfully applied professional knowledge
There are people earning $1000 an hour doing counseling, and people earning minimum wage operating unspecified equipment. Applied professional knowledge could be anything, unless it’s explained. This is beyond the normal meaning of “office assistant”. Did you have a job title, or something else we can use to upgrade this work?

Manager, “SENUKAI”, Lithuania, (July 2006- July 2007)
• Managed item database, updsated (updated) website content.

• Sold products, advised people, prepared demonstrations.
Explain type of industry, product types, indicate whether this was sales or advice to contracted clients, etc. Demo work is also a professional skill relating to sales presentations, important higher grade work, very useful for job applications.

EDUCATION
• Computer Science (Information Systems Emphasis) A.S. Moraine Valley Community College, Palos Hills, IL (2009 – PRESENT)
• ESL, Hannibal LaGrange College, Hannibal, MO, (Fall 2008)
• Klaipeda University, Klaipeda, Lithuania, (2006-2008)
Graduation level? Course? EU recognized qualifications? Because if so, they’re often recognized in the US, or some form of equivalents.
• Graduate, Jurgio Pabrezos High School, Kretinga, Lithuania (1994-2006)

uttam_giet

To
The General Manager (HR) [ Name and Designation (Bold Words)]
xxxxx Limited
Delhi – 110001

Uttam Agrawal
xxxxx Street,
xxxxxxxx,
xxxxxxxxxx,
Ph. no - xxxxxxxxxx

[Sub: Application for the position of ___________ in your esteemed organization.]

Respected Sir, (Always use ‘Respected’)

With reference to your advertisement dated 14th may’ 08 in The Times of India for the position of ___________ . I would like to place myself as a strong contender before you.

OR

This has reference to your advertisement dated 14th may’ 08 in The Times of India for the position of ____________. In the said connection I take this opportunity to apply for the said position as a strong contender.

/*This is the Introduction i.e the first paragraph of your application/*

( Now the Second Paragraph is the Self Introduction)

Try to start the second paragraph with the below mentioned lines:

- I have the pleasure to inform you that……
- I would like to state that……………………
- At the outset, I would like to describe myself as……
- I am glad to inform you that………
- Please be informed that…….
- Kindly note that

After that describe yourself in not more than 5 lines……

/* 2nd Paragraph*/

At the outset, I would like to describe myself as a hard worker, committed, dynamic and an adaptable person who loves to accept challenges and who finds out innovative ways to solve/tackle any problem. I completed my B.Tech from G.I.E.T, Gunupur where I majored in Electronics and Tele- Communication. I strongly believe that I can make a very meaningful and impactful contribution to your reputed organization.

I have a firm conviction that the attributes mentioned above are a firm conviction of my abilities and hence it would find a favorable response at your end.

My detailed Curriculum Vitae is attached/enclosed herewith for your perusal and kind consideration.

Hoping for a kind and favorable/positive response from your good self at an early date/as per your convenience.

Yours Sincerely
Uttam Agrawal

Encl : a.a.

POINTS TO BE REMEMBERED:

- Try to maintain the same space from top to bottom and also from right to left.

- Finally make a bolder border.

- Always use A-4 size J.K Bond paper or Executive bond paper only.

- When copies are asked to be marked

c.c. 1. Sales Manager
2. Finance Manager
3. Area Manager

If only one personc.c. Sales Manager

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Guest · Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 12:03 pm Post subject:

These are some good examples

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