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caroline_86 · Newbie Joined: 09 Sep 2007 Posts: 2 Career Advice: +0/-0

Hi can you check my cover letter its for a placement many thanks

Dear Sir/Madam,

Student Opportunities – Placement

I am writing to apply for the student opportunities which I saw on the Microsoft website. I am currently a second year student studying for a BA (Hons) computing for business at Northumbria University. A one year work placement is a required component of my degree programme.

I am very keen to work for Microsoft because of your reputation as a global brand with an excellent reputation, Microsoft are leading in the development in technology. Microsoft is a technologically innovative company and for the opportunities for career development
I am interested in a position as a Technical Consultant as:

• I enjoy analysing and solving problems
• There would be more responsibility
• I can enhance my knowledge
• It would combine my business and technical skills
• Embrace new challenges

However I would be happy to consider other posts within your organisation.

As you can see from my CV, I have 3 years administrative experience working in a busy office. I have gained valuable work experience skills that I can bring to Microsoft. I have strong motivation to learn new skills. I have gained many skills through my university course and from my previous/current job role which I am responsible for a variety of jobs to be done on a day-to-day basis and through them have improved my organisational skills, ability to prioritise work and work to deadlines.

I feel I have the creativity, enthusiasm and skills to make a significant contribution to your company’s team.

I would be most grateful if you would consider me for a position within your company. I am available for an interview at any time and look forward to hearing from you

Yours faithfully

lexa10881 · Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2007 1:03 am Post subject:

Looks good, just try to not make it too long as it can be a turnoff to employers. I think you are about fine though. This will give you some insight on cover letter structure, types, etc. Of course, remember that by searching the site you can find more detailed information if you need it in addition to using the forum.

http://www.cvtips.com/cover_letter.html

ank06 · Expert Joined: 20 Sep 2006 Posts: 247 Career Advice: +1/-0

Two things, dear:

1. Lose the

• I enjoy analyzing and solving problems
• There would be more responsibility
• I can enhance my knowledge
• It would combine my business and technical skills
• Embrace new challenges

...thing and write it in a single phrase in which you enumerate these reasons (It's "analyzing" not "analysing" btw)

2. Try not to start all your utterances with I did, I was, I worked, I would like etc etc. A cover letter is not about you, a cover letter is about what you can do for the employer Wink

http://www.cvtips.com/cover_letter.html

caroline_86 · Newbie Joined: 09 Sep 2007 Posts: 2 Career Advice: +0/-0

Hi thanks for the tips. wont be getting rid of bullets points as they ask that i write why i choose that position to apply for

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