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 Posted: Wed Dec 10, 2008 5:11 pm Post subject: Please review the grammar of my cover letter... |
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| Quote: | Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to enquire whether you have any computer aided design related vacancies within your organisation, either now or possibly in the near future, for a graduate of my skills and experience. I am interested in your job as a CATIA Designer with ref number 11029-CICAT8015_918499, advertised at jobsite.co.uk on December 10th, 2008.
As you will see from my enclosed CV, I have recently graduated from Birmingham City University with a BSc Hons in Computer Aided Automotive Design and I am now keen to bring my academic knowledge into the workplace. I was heavily involved with CAD systems, specifically Dassault Systems CATIA V5, to complete assignments throughout the course.
For my final project at Birmingham City University I designed an entire body kit for a student Formula vehicle which, upon completion, was comparable Formula One. I feel that with my invaluable experience, I would be a great asset for your company.
"I believe that my key qualities are my excellent interpersonal skills and the ability to communicate concisely at all levels combined with my talent for effective prioritisation. I see myself as a highly dedicated and strongly driven individual. I am honest and work well as part of a team and I am comfortable using my own initiative. I am reliable and thrive under pressure."
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"I am an individual who believes that quality must lie at the root of everything we do. I am very enthusiastic, energetic, a quick learner, excellent speaker, a good team player, highly motivated, very reliable and cooperative. As my previous employers would vouch, my confident nature, coupled with my team working skills, has made me a natural leader amongst my peers."
I am extremely excited about this opportunity it has a definite appeal for me, both on a personal and career level. Enclosed is my curriculum vita, as specified in your advertisement for your review. Should you have any questions or require clarification on any information, please do not hesitate to contact me. I would very much welcome the opportunity to discuss how I can contribute to your organization.
Kind Regards
Amanjit Singh Sull
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As you can probably tell I am a graduate, who is currently looking at jobs I wish to apply for but I am lacking in experience. So I am trying to style a seeking but specific cover letter at the same time, I don't know whether this would be a negative move from me or not. Could you please please please review my grammar. Anyway I have two cover letters that I have used as of late but I do not feel they would be as strong as the one I have posted above, but for your reference to understand where I am coming from I shall add both here too.
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| Quote: | I am writing to enquire whether you have any computer aided design related vacancies within your organisation, either now or possibly in the near future, for a graduate of my skills and experience. I am interested in your job as a CATIA Designer with ref number 11029-CICAT8015_918499, advertised at jobsite.co.uk on December 10th, 2008.
As you will see from my enclosed CV, I have recently graduated from Birmingham City University with a BSc Hons in Computer Aided Automotive Design and I am now keen to bring my academic knowledge into the workplace. I successfully designed and constructed a small single seated racing car as part of my individual project and am au fait with CAD and CATIA.
I believe that my key qualities are my excellent interpersonal skills and the ability to communicate concisely at all levels combined with my talent for effective prioritisation. I see myself as a highly dedicated and strongly driven individual. I am honest and work well as part of a team and I am comfortable using my own initiative. I am reliable and thrive under pressure.
I would very much welcome the opportunity to discuss how I can contribute to your organization and I look forward to hearing from you. |
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| Quote: | This is in reference to the position of Graduate CAD Technician advertised at totaljobs.com on Nov 18th, 2008.
I recently graduated from the Birmingham City University with a Bachelor of Science (Honours) majoring in Computer Aided Automotive Design. While studying this program I have acquired skills that can be efficiently utilized in your available position.
I was heavily involved with CAD systems, specifically Dassault Systems CATIA V5, to complete assignments throughout the course.I am now highly proficient at designing new automotive parts, as well as developing original product designs via sketch to concept modeling.
For my final project at Birmingham City University I designed a bodykit for a student Formula vehicle which, upon completion, was comparable Formula One. I feel that with my invaluable experience, I would be a great asset for your company.
I am an individual who believes that quality must lie at the root of everything we do. I am very enthusiastic, energetic, a quick learner, excellent speaker, a good team player, highly motivated, very reliable and cooperative. As my previous employers would vouch, my confident nature, coupled with my team working skills, has made me a natural leader amongst my peers.
I am extremely excited about this opportunity it has a definite appeal for me, both on a personal and career level. Enclose is my curriculum vitae, as specified in your advertisement for your review. Should you have any questions or require clarification on any information, please do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to meeting with you in the near future. |
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Help me please! |
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