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nina 23 · Newbie Joined: 02 Dec 2008 Posts: 1 Career Advice: +0/-0

Hello everyone,
Im from Grmany and i worte a cover letter in english but im sure there are lots of grammar mistakes. I d like to aske some nativespeakers to do me a favor and spellcheck it! Would love to hear ur opinion and how can i make it better!
Thanks!

I was very interested to see your advertisement for Marketing & Strategy Consultant on www.jobvector.de. I recently graduated from University of XXXX with an academic degree in Biotechnology.

I have always had a strong interest in Business Management not only in Biotechnology but in various fields, because of related principles. It fascinates me how new ideas are realised by capable people and give birth to companies which give new opportunities for people all over the globe. This is one of my motivations to join your company and take significant part in developing it. The first glance at interaction between business and science I became as I was attending the course in “business management for biotechnologists”

According to your advertisement, your position requires strong interest in science, especially working in at the interface between science and business. Already graduated form the university i know that there is so much which is not known to me. This brings us to the general interest in life sciences and lifelong learning which I am dedicated to. My work experiences (Internship and Diplom-Thesis) at (firm Name) gave me opportunity to gain insights in developing new innovative products in field of life sciences and bringing them successfully into the market. As I originally come from XXXX studying in Germany was for me an international experience because of meeting and communicating with students from all over the world (noticing pleasantly the lots of similarities between different cultures).

My scientific background is versatile as my studies expanded from molecular biology to protein analytics to cancer cell signalling in which I lastly wrote my diplom thesis at (firm name). In those nine Months I gained a great amount of knowledge in Cell signalling and worked practically with cancer cell lines including studying them at the proteome level and analysing signal transduction induced by epidermal growth factor.

If you would like to schedule an interview or otherwise discuss my interest in this position, please feel free to call me at the number listed above.

Best Regards

Nina23

Pauloz · Posted: Thu Dec 04, 2008 5:25 am Post subject:

nina23

Main concern is the word "diploma", not "diplom". Use Replace on the document, replacing diplom with diploma, to make sure you get all of them.

If you're using Word, trying loading the English dictionary, which should include spellcheck.

A few minor corrections, and some grammar, naturally. My people were German, (150 years ago) and I've learned a bit about the differences:

I was very interested to see your advertisement for Marketing & Strategy Consultant on www.jobvector.de. I recently graduated from University of XXXX with an academic degree in Biotechnology.

I have always had a strong interest in Business Management, not only in Biotechnology but in various fields, because of related principles. It fascinates me how new ideas are realised realized by capable people and give birth to companies which give new opportunities for people all over the globe. This is one of my motivations to join your company and take significant part in developing it. The first glance at interaction between business and science I became as I was attending the course in “Business Management for Biotechnologists” (Capitals on nouns, like in German, in English it's common in titles)

According to your advertisement, your position requires strong interest in science, especially working in (delete, two prepositions) at the interface between science and business. Having already graduated form from the university i I know that there is so much which is not known to me. This brings us to the general interest in life sciences and lifelong learning to which I am dedicated. (Don't end sentences with an infinitive like "to" if you can help it.) My work experiences (Internship and Diplom-Thesis) at (firm Name) gave me opportunity to gain insights in developing new innovative products in the field of life sciences and bringing them successfully into the market. As I originally come from XXXX studying in Germany was for me an international experience because of meeting and communicating with students from all over the world (noticing pleasantly the lots of similarities between different cultures).

My scientific background is versatile as my studies expanded from molecular biology to protein analytics to cancer cell signalling in which I lastly wrote my diplom thesis at (firm name). In those nine Mmonths I gained a great amount of knowledge in Cell signalling and worked practically with cancer cell lines including studying them at the proteome level and analysing analyzing signal transduction induced by epidermal growth factor.

If you would like to schedule an interview or otherwise discuss my interest in this position, please feel free to call me at the number listed above.

If anything in the corrections isn't clear, post a reply and I'll get the message.

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